in broken sentences,
incomplete words!
You take my name
and you stop...
you can't kill me
like this
for I know not
what lies beyond my
name
when you call 'it',
for I know surely
what is left behind
when you call 'it'.
My name!
is it all what you
have......
Memories hover
Lips curl in a smile
Eyes shine in bliss
this was a time
'once upon a time'
now what is left
is a 'name'
called and halted at
before emotions flow & ruin
everything preserved!
Sometimes its better to forget that ' once upon a time '
ReplyDeleteNice poem Shaifali...
Teena..life is lovely with all the memories. each memory makes us a better and beautiful person. Take care!
ReplyDeletebeautifully expressed!
ReplyDeleteShaifali this time the image of the pink bits of what i presume is paper hearts and ur words take me to the memories of what i sense is that wonderful moments of bickering when u r in love. you know what i mean that pyaar mein rootna aur phir manaana. You might get the feeling that the fragrant love has ebbed or it's ebbing but the matter of fact is that other things take precedence and the scenario changes.
ReplyDeleteMine was an arranged marriage but i have seen almost the same ebbing of romantic feelings happen to all i know even to those who've had love marriages. Sure there were tantrums from me too when finally i would land up asking,"Don't you love me anymore...?"
What i'm trying to say is whether love is fulfilled or unfulfilled the only thing that remains constant is change. Sooner or later the passion slows down and fades and all u r left with is those fragrant memories.
" Hum hain mushtaq aur woh bezar
Ya ilahi yeh majra kya hai?" ...
Mirza Asad-Ullah Ghalib in his famous Dil e nadan tujhe hua kya hai.
Meaning- i am so eager and he so disinterested
Oh Lord, what is this affair?
Sry my comments seem to be appearing on ur box like a blogpost but i am a wordy woman and by now u know that don't u?
ur words are beautiful as always.Loved this one too.
In case my thoughts went tangent,do let me know about ur feelings for this particular poem.
What i could gather was your eagerness and someone's detachment for whom u just exist as an 'it' now.
Hey Shaifali u write beautiful poems urself.
ReplyDeleteThanks for visiting my blog :)
I love the thought and it's uniqueness. First few lines are so beautifully crafted...
ReplyDeleteBeautifully written, very touching.
ReplyDeletevery nice, & thanx for coming my blog
ReplyDeletenice sonnet/गहन भावों से सजी हुई खूबसूरत कविता आपको बहुत बहुत बधाई और शुभकामनाएं |आपका दिन शुभ और खूबसूरत हो |
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ReplyDelete@No head Girl...Thanks very much for your visit. I love poetry and I was glad I could read some very fine creations on your blog. Keep visiting!
ReplyDelete@Saru....As always your appreciations counts :-)I am glad you found the thought unique.
@Aakash...Its nice to find somebody new on the blog! It is highly motivating. Thanks very much for your visit and liking. I hope you would keep coming back.
@Amarendra "Amar" ....Its a pleasure to see you commenting on my poem. You are such a beautiful poet with such fan following :-) ...Thanks a lot for your visit. I am glad.
@JaiKrishna Rai Tusharji.....Aapke shabdo ke liye bahut dhanyavad. Koi naya reader blog hamesha achcha lagta hai. Aapke bhi sabhi din khush beete, yahi kamna hai. I would like to see you back here :)
@Shivani....Sending you a smile which hopefully you can interpret :-)
ReplyDeleteI am amazed with you interpretations. Lovely to have you as somebody reads me. I am a bit slow to comment on your posts...but I am taking time. (moving from France to USA soon..so lots of work)..but don't worry I m there :)
Beautiful thoughts presented beautifully....
ReplyDelete@Induji, Thanks for the appreciation. Its a pleasure to have a comment from you.
ReplyDeleteHave a nice day.
its beautiful poems
ReplyDeleteDear Shaifali, could not send you an email so here i am .. my name is sushmita jha and i appear on FB with the same name.. :)
ReplyDeleteLovely words !first line is eye catchy :)
ReplyDelete"adhikaar" - this was the term clicked in my mind when i started reading it.
Thanks Reicha.
ReplyDeletePoetry offers the reader the pleasure to intrepret in his own images! I am glad you found it lovely.
Keep visiting.
Some Changes do hurt!
ReplyDeleteAwesome :)