Mar 15, 2012

Just you!

                                 














Caged,
stiffled,
burning
inside!

Words,
sentences,
feelings
dying!

Dawn,
golden heat,
dusk
all forms!

Hours,
minutes,
seconds
all hands!

It's you 
everywhere
all the time!

18 comments:

  1. Intense, as the word goes. I love brevity.

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  2. Different n nice.... loved it...

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  3. short sweet powerful dripping with feelings.......

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  4. और रचनाओं से कुछ अलग है...पर,एक चीज़...एक भाव...एक शख्स वही है.............अच्छी है.SHORT>>>CRISP>>>POWERFUL.

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  5. powerful...deep....sad..to the point.... and the photo ... all together mesmerising (though hurting and making me feel sad..) .... you are gifted...

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  6. शैफाली....हर चीज़ में मेरी क्यूँ है शिरकत तुम्हारी
    अजीब है न मेरी जां यह फितरत तुम्हारी .
    short..crisp...brimming with emotions....yet,powerful.

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  7. yaar mere comment kahaan gaayab ho rahe hain...do baar comment post kar chukii huun ...nazar ek bhii nahin aa rahaa hai...spam mein gaya kyaa....agar hai to mukt kar do ........

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  8. wow!!!!!!!!! great work again...Beautiful Shaifali......

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  9. This was just beautiful, Shaifali:)

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  10. Awesome lines! Amazing self-expression!

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  11. I really like the way you transited from first to the second paragraph. The second one is my favorite here. And you culminated it on a very beautiful note...:)

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  12. आज आपके ब्लॉग पर बहुत दिनों बाद आना हुआ अल्प कालीन व्यस्तता के चलते मैं चाह कर भी आपकी रचनाएँ नहीं पढ़ पाया....बहुत बेहतरीन प्रस्‍तुति...!

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  13. flows beautifully, except for the "golden heat" line, and ends in a lovely note :-)

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